MISTAKE MONDAY for July 22: Can YOU spot what’s wrong?

Can you spot what’s wrong in the image below? Please post your answer as a comment.

There’s one obvious mistakes, plus some other weaknesses.

I post these challenges to raise awareness of the importance of proofreading.

Polly says:

It’s awkwardly written. Seems to be a missing link. Comma atrocities. Paragraph combines topics that should stand alone. S’all I got.

Susan Weiner, CFA says:

Polly,

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment! This is indeed a poorly written paragraph.

Another thing I noticed is the misspelling of logistics, which is missing a T.